I like coffee
you like coke
[we both love caffeine]
I like chocolate
you like vanilla
[we both love sweetness]
I like fall
you like spring
[we both love breathing those
fresh, cool breezes]
I like yours
you like mine
[we both love smooth skin
warmed by hungry hands
restless mouths
soft sheets]
I think
were going to
get along
just fine















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the arrangement supports the content very well I think, a little fragmented (maybe breathless; maybe unsure) but not arhythmic or stilted... Why have the last line apart from the rest of that stanza if the overall impression is that everything is coming together fine?...that seems counter to the message. The rest I feel works well with my eyes as I read.
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I think you're right. See if this works better. Thanks again.
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