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some people burn
so brightly that
they flame out
too soon

as if their frail
physicalities house
a double portion
of soul

and this life
simply can’t
contain
them
:heart:
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:iconsebleikvold:
sebleikvold Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2009
This is great! It's really true too....I've seen it happen......

Check out my poetry sometime I would love to have you critique it [link]
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the-mighty-pillow Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh the ending!

Amazing! :heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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ejectionletter Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
i think sometimes life cannot contain any of our explosive souls.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Perhaps that's why it's so hard sometimes...
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FailureAtItsFinest Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
'as if their frail
physicalities house
a double portion
of soul'

wow....that's amazing, and, for once, im speechless.
:hug:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much. I rather like this one myself. :hug:
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Keraness Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
Ooh, Cindy...! :faint: :heart:

It's so true. I love how you've taken a well-known quote ("Only the good die young") and made it unique. 'double portion of soul' is great. :heart:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, Kera. I'm glad you like it. :hug:
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2008
"a double portion of soul"

What a great phrase! In fact the 2nd stanza as a whole is what I keep coming back to. Very, very nice.

This poem is like a thought or the beginning of a conversation. On one hand it makes me think on my own about what you've said, and on the other hand it makes me want to hear more of what you think! Big impact for so few (but well chosen) words. :nod:
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