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stilettos are bad for my feet
   but nice for my calves

underwires are rude to my ribs
   but kind to my cleavage

corsets bully my lungs
   but hourglass my waistline

      like you

         so good to my body
            but, oh, so hard
              on my heart
©2008-2009 *Blueskye27
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This one's been...uncooperative...

**edit - rewrote the third stanza, but I still don't know...

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:iconlivingcomforteagle:
i see you got it to cooperate quite well. :)

--
dark pictures, thrones, the stones that pilgrims kiss,
poems that take a thousand years to die;
but ape the immortality of this
red label on a little butterfly.
-vladimir nabokov
:icongiggidy-03:
I like it. Unique compare & contrast, last one's potent. Enjoyable read.
:iconarkansawyer:
:thumbsup:

--
The trail is the thing, not the end of the trail. Travel too fast and you miss all you are traveling for.
Louis L'Amour (1908 - 1988), Ride the Dark Trail
:iconscott2753:
Great job - however in my honest opinion - you need none of these my lovely friend ;)

--
A Dream is but a Fantasy that has not yet been turned into Reality...

ummm - by me :D
:iconthaumadzo:
lol

--
"Seeing" the unusual...EVERY DAY
:iconpseudometry:
Seems quite cooperative to me.
Good metaphor, and as I read it I actually started nodding appreciatively; even though I don't wear heels/underwires/mascara (or at least that's my story and I'm sticking to it!)
I think the words are very effectively wielded =)

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'Beauty will save the world'
--Fyodor Dostoevsky
:iconb1gfan:
poems, like lovers, can be kinda hard on the heart :D but this one seems to have a fondness for you :clap:
:iconvisualpoetress:
Oooh so true never tried stilettos.

I have a funny story, one of my underwires started coming out of the bra underneath by my armpit. I yanked it out and threw it in the trash and one of my male coworkers asked what it was I said it was a bra underwire .... he blushed so badly.

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:iconyouinventedme:
builds nicely to the close


well done, cindy


xo!

--
one half of ~ZombiesAteUs

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