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months of roiling
sickness abruptly end
in clenches of pain
five minutes apart

hospital sterility,
privacy on display
like a helpless animal
in a pet store window

as she’s put in
an open gown,
shorn, poked,
prodded, handled

a stranger’s hand
travels deep,
a ravishment
necessary to

turn a baby
stubbornly breach
but a violation
nonetheless

no knives, scalpels
life rips its way out
a bleeding relief
followed by rough

hands kneading
her abdomen, forcing
out the afterbirth,
pieces which fed

her child for months,
gave her life, provided
the energy for first screams
beautiful and lusty

she lies quietly as
shock sets in, shaking
violently beneath blankets,
teeth chattering

a tear sliding into
her hair as unseen hands
slip warmed socks
on her freezing feet

her eyes close against
rising salt as kind voices
gently soothe, cloth wipes
away blood, sweat

she’s just an ordinary
woman reenacting millennia
of life-giving, her body bearing
the brunt of humanity

and in this lies her
majestic essence, the
willingness to bring forth
the next tomorrow

to continue the unbroken
string of generations
first groaned into being
by Eve herself
*hamletspants' prompt: majesty

My daughter's birth was...difficult. Not sure if this one works; I had trouble with it.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009
Vividly realised.

It's curious that so much human suffering is caused by that huge cranium. The price of that enormous brain.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It's vividly felt, too, believe me. :)
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Melanophrionsa Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
A beautiful poem.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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:iconmalandante:
Malandante Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I think it worked. Really put the reader in the position.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:w00t:
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Malandante Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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hamletspants Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008
It definitely works.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, sweet. Another one that gave me fits!
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amichan01 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008   Writer
I had c-sections with both of mine, but I can relate in a way. :) I had 14 hours of labor with my daughter (23 months old), and then a schedule c-section with my son (9 months old). Totally worth it both times, but hard in its own way, too. :)

Great poem! Details the glorious struggle that is bringing a new life into the world! :hug: :heart:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I had both of mine natural, no drugs (except a shot of demerol with my daughter). The breathing helps, but that last hour...oh, my. I almost had to have a c-section with my daughter because she was breach, but the doctor was able to turn her enough.

You're so right; it's so horrible and wonderful all at the same time. :)
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amichan01 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2008   Writer
:hug:
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Miarath Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2008   General Artist
Wow! Awesome work on this one. I love it how you brought out all the shades of giving birth. :hug: :love:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. It's a hard day, but it's worth it. :)
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Miarath Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2008   General Artist
:nod: I think it's not called going into labour for nothing.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, yes, you're absolutely right. :)
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:iconmiarath:
Miarath Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008   General Artist
:nod: And you've written it so wonderfully. :D
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jaswannabeme Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2008
yes, i remembered it well, first child was difficult, the second one, not too bad :)
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Mine were the other way around - my first was a dream (never sick or anything); the second was tough. :)
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jaswannabeme Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2008
Aww, tht's unusual, ah well, they're all different :)
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ihaveastory Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Makes me remember how much in awe of women I am.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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1001G Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008
oh the memories.....are flooding back....and if i remember correctly the kneading is what hurt in the worst way..I YELLED just leave it in there!!!!!!! The end result was worth it but done that been there and never again.:D
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Me, too - too old now anyway...
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1001G Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008
never to old.......
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atbarnett Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008
Oh, this brings back a memory! Well done.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Glad they're just memories. :aww:
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ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008
Oh gosh, it's so sad... ]:
But I think it works though.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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ItsxMagik Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008
You're welcome. :cuddle:
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful. My son was easy to give birth to, so I'm thankful for that.

I wish you could have had the same. This piece shows your strength though, no less.

But, I did almost die 2 weeks after having him, so what you had troublesome couldn't compare and so your lucky that that is the worst you experienced with that birth.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Almost died two weeks later? Goodness, what happened? Glad you're okay. :hug:
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Peritonitis. I posted about it in one of my journals.
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Flobblem Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Professional Writer
And this is woman, her majesty the cradle of life.
Her gift that of children, her tithe the love from our hearts.
Our pain and our absolution, a pain that never goes away.

You inspired the above^
Obviously (being a bloke) I cannot understand the pain and emotion of childbirth, but a measure of the experience was portrayed in this poem.
Brilliant imagery, thanks for sharing ^^
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, that's beautiful. If I inspired that even in part, I'm honored. Thank you. :hug:
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Pumpkin-frog Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Beautiful poem.

I actually can't wait to be a mom. I'm terribly excited about the possibility actually. :D

Nicely Done Cindy my dear.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Regina. :hug:
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Pumpkin-frog Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
My pleasure. :hug:
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H3ikal Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
I find it rather unpleasant to read it because it sounds very fragmented and broken as well lack fluidity and articulation.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It was a rather unpleasant day as well, so that fits.
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WingsOfTears Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008  Hobbyist Artist
Oh wow ... this one really does work ...

I had 2 very different births ... both slightly complicated and yet both so wonderful as well.

This really made me stop and remember ...
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Do you really think so? Thanks so much. I had some trouble with this one. My two were quite different, too.
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WingsOfTears Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008  Hobbyist Artist
I love reading work that I can relate to and which make me stop and remember or look at my own life and you definetly did that.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad. Thanks again. :hug:
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xShadowedDarknessx Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
beautiful and yet...it still manages to capture my fear of hospitals...i hate hospitals...

wonderfully done blue :hug:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, sweet. I'm not too big on hospitals either...
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xShadowedDarknessx Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2008
they're creepy, smell funny, and for some reason i asscociate the place with death...

your welcome :heart:
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XxWreckoningxX Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
=p I'm going to take my parent's advice and not have kids till I'm 35. =D Nah, hopefully I'll be prepared when I have mine.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
That's good thinking. Enjoy your time then enjoy your kids. :hug:
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XxWreckoningxX Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2008
:hug: I hope I will.
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