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love words
hide behind
my teeth like
stolen pennies

stashed under
my tongue until
the taste leeches
into my blood
like the poison
of your
forgetting

I swallow
them

bitter
little pills
burning like
bad liquor

that turn
my heart

to ash
Just trying to write...
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:iconprettycrazy:
PrettyCrazy Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Trying?!
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:iconpagesofdreams:
PagesOfDreams Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010   Writer
Woah. Pennies must be hard to swallow. :O

Wonderful poem.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, painful I think. :nod:
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:iconmeljoy68:
meljoy68 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Trying and succeeding. I could taste the words...
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:iconthings-i-have-loved:
things-i-have-loved Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009  Student General Artist
heartbreaking. :heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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:iconroyalocean:
royalocean Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009  Professional Writer
Featured here [link]
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2009   Writer
the poison
of your
forgetting


i can taste it.

:heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Shane. :hug:
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:iconloverz116:
loverz116 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009
[link] featured! :heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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:iconloverz116:
loverz116 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
:hug:
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:icon1001g:
1001G Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009
dark one cindy
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes, they just come out that way...
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:icon1001g:
1001G Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
:nod:
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:iconcrookd-bullet:
crookd-bullet Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Tragic & honest & beautiful.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconscaredambitious:
ScaredAmbitious Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009
You made the very, very short lines work. I loved your concise metaphors.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. :hug:
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:iconkorimito:
Korimito Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009
Fabulous composition.

This saddens me to no end.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. :hug:
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:iconpraytell:
praytell Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009
you succeeded, cindy..
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, sweetheart. :hug:
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:iconpraytell:
praytell Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:huggle:
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:iconmiarath:
Miarath Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009
Wow! Great job on it and so true. :heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Mia. :hug:
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:iconwingsoftears:
WingsOfTears Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009  Hobbyist Artist
Oh how true your words ring to me ...
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry this hit so close to home. :hug:
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:iconathazagoraphobias:
Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Such vivid imagery! Honestly, for a second I believed I was about to puke. (This is not an insult.)

:heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2009
The poison of love swallowed conveyed by a vivid metaphor.

The misery of one who cannot forget and one who will not remember.

The atmosphere of bleak austerity is emphasised by the lean and unembroidered language.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the kind words and the encouragement, Alec. :hug:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009
:hug: :heart: :hug:
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:iconb1gfan:
b1gfan Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2009  Student Writer
Raw images though Cindy - metallic and tangy :) Feeling a little blocked of late? I myself can never seem to get ahead of the paper tide that just keeps coming and try as I might to make time I end up having to spend it on work or parenting (both of which are of course important too) :D
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I know exactly how you feel, my buddy. It's all downhill from here though. Thanksgiving now and straight shot to Christmas break. :hug:
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:iconb1gfan:
b1gfan Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Student Writer
:D Just gotta pull through is all :D
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:iconelenlaer:
Elenlaer Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2009
that was amazing! well written, well described, well done! :clap:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. :hug:
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:iconbatticus:
Batticus Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2009
I can taste every word.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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:iconbatticus:
Batticus Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2009
:hug: :)
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:iconjessicaconk:
jessicaconk Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely beautiful :heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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:icontyc113:
TyC113 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
That is perfect imagery, Cindy.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Ty. :hug:
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:icontyc113:
TyC113 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
welcome, Cindy.
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