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he begged
her forgiveness

and she promised
to give it

as soon as
she forgot

his name
:iconhamletspants:'s prompt: betrayer
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2009
In full Dorothy Parker mode.

Some serious wit.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Gotta love Dorothy...
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2009
And you too!!
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2009
Oh yeah - and I love your play on the saying "forgive and forget"!
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2009
I don't know why, but this one made me laugh. I think I've made the same promise. I don't think I've forgotten his name yet....
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Miarath Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009   General Artist
I don't know, but this sounds both sad and ironic. :)
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, you're right. :hug:
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:iconmiarath:
Miarath Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2009   General Artist
:hug: You're most welcome.
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femluc Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2009
is amazing as you can cover so many things to say in short words :hug:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Lucero. :heart:
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009   Writer
I quite like this dark twist on the concept of forgive and forget. Sometimes it really does feel like it has to be that way.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, sometimes we just can't let go...
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009   Writer
Yeah. Sadly true.
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trikuti Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009
creative expert on human condition :worship:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
You say the loveliest things. :hug:
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trikuti Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009
:hug:
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Admantina Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
Aw.. sad, but I kind of grinned at how dry her reply is.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:nod:
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atbarnett Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
Never quite thought of it this way....interesting!
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Masa-chan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
Isn't it funny
How we pluck the petals?

:heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:nod:
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whoapony Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
Heh! ;)
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forWinds Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful.

:)
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marshmallow-pies Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
Well I don't think this feels forced at all. I do love how succinct it is - the words seem to flow into one another. The contrast between title and poem is genius.
To me, your best poems seem to be the shortest - you always get the point across in a powerful way, leaving enough of the thinking up to the reader...
Wonderful work as usual :hug:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Katherine. I really appreciate that. I do prefer the shorter format when I can manage it.

Perhaps it's just a bit of the after holiday blues. :hug:
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marshmallow-pies Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
Well, it truly seems to me that you can take practically any situation and transcribe it into pure poetry.

And cheer up! It's almost epiphany... I do understand how you're feeling though; I can never stand taking down the tree until after epiphany, so we're leaving it up until Saturday.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Epiphany? Is that a holiday?
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marshmallow-pies Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
Well it certainly is here. It's when the wise men give their presents to Jesus. :aww: In fact, Epiphany is the Spanish Christmas.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I did not know that. Thanks so much for explaining it to me. :)
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marshmallow-pies Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
It looks like we all learn something new everyday. :hug:
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Student Writer
;)
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Student Writer
:hug: I like the twist on forgive and forget - as if the later must precede the former instead of as it often works in the old adage :D very cool reversal there Cindy :heart:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Dave. Everything I write feels a little forced lately, so I'm glad you think it's okay. :hug:
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Student Writer
:hug: I know the feeling - maybe you need a little break or something :D Maybe it's all about the holiday season :shrug:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, perhaps a hiatus is in order. Of course, the last time I quit writing (though I didn't do poetry at the time), it was ten years before I started back... :hmm:
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Student Writer
Well then don't take a break! :D That's much too long to wait for more work to come :) Maybe a shift in the inspirational sources or the 1-2 pieces a day expectation...or maybe it's time to read the work of a few totally new poets to pick up a little on a new vibe... or maybe you just don't worry about it at all and you just keep writing because it's grand and all the best stuff will just sort of come along in the midst of writing everything else anyway so why worry :D
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know, sweet. Maybe I'd learn to be more satisfied if I quit thinking again. ;p
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Snow-Machine Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
I think I told someone something similar once...

"Maybe one day we can be friends if I can think of you and feel absolutely nothing."

Well. I still don't want to be friends.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Precisely...
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jsting Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
this made me chuckle. :)
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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Teague-Drydan Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
ouch...that's a defininte burn. I wouldn't want to get on the speaker's bad side...

Nicely written. I like how succinct (I think that's the word i'm looking for ^^;) it is. Very powerful
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Succinct is good. I love succinct. Thanks. :)
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Teague-Drydan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: Succinct it is then!
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009
OUCH! Stab me through the heart and leave me bleeding, PLEASE!!

:heart:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Youch!!
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