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at the nexus where my unhappiness
   intersects with your need

we implode

two crumbling structures
   that fall into each other

our dust

sifting together - a chemical
   conflagration in which willingly

we burn
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deeclear Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:clap:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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deeclear Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
thankies for the hug:D
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deeclear Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
All I can say is WOW!!! Very nice and visual. :D
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I love wow's! Thanks. :hug:
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deeclear Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
and i love to give them. lolol :D
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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Blanzeflor Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2009
Derrida would be pleased.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Lauren. :hug:
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frazzled-mage Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2009
....at the request of one of the many voices in my head...Thank you for representing their thoughts on paper. Well done.

jfk
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
My thanks to the voice in your head. I'm glad it...um...he... likes it. :hug:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009
The language in this poem is marked by a feeling that borders on shame.

There is a strong feeling of impersonality and bitterness. Written, though, with all your customary skill.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
That's interesting. I didn't sense the shame and bitterness myself - more an interesting intersecting of two lives. I'll have to look at that again...
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009
My feeling is that if at least one party is able to speak of unhappiness and need, with no reference to positive emotions, the relationship is addictive rather than fulfilling.

The reference to chemical conflagration is stripped of any redeeming humanity. One of the circles of hell indeed.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, what a great analysis. Thanks, Alec. :hug:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2009
:heart:
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immortelenigma Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009
A piece sharp with emotion. The first two lines are stunning and remain my favorite part of this. Very well done.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
What a kind compliment. Thanks very much. :hug:
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strange Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
I love the word "willingly" in this poem, it surprises the reader :)
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I sometimes worry about being predictable, so thanks. :hug:
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strange Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
hehe you're welcome :)
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Malandante Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: Stunning.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
What a lovely word...thanks. :)
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Malandante Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yes it is a lovely word. And you are most welcome :glomp:
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ToaAkatsuki Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
ahhhhh. you are amazing.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
And you're lovely for saying that. Thanks. :hug:
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alapip Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
as the fire subsides
perhaps a cooling casting
there found nestled
in the settled embers

worth the burnishing required
to make a work of lasting
art to keep a restless
heart long remembered

'twould be good to think so?

:heart:
pip
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I'd like to think so... :hug:
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009  Student Writer
Yummy Cindy - and tragic, but yummy for we do soooo burn :D
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I like yummy... and goodness, but don't we though? :D
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2009  Student Writer
We do - and every time we do we say, AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH wait, did you feel that? No? AAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

:D
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, this made me smile...
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2009  Student Writer
:w00t: my work is done :hug:
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