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dreams were cheap
when we were young

we could crumple them up
like miswritten love notes
and throw them out
to start again

lazily plucking new ones
from the rose-colored
fields of our insouciance

but now the days shorten
roads once open are walled shut
our feet turn in aimless circles

dreams become dear
as one by one
they die beneath
reality’s heavy boots

and none rise up to
replace them
I haven't much felt like writing for a while, so I thought I'd try to write my way out of it. This one's a bit rough yet.
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frazzled-mage Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009
Not sure what to say to you about this Cindy. I mean how much do you get as a writer from...

"DAMN that's spot on!" or "WOW, get out of my brain!"
anyway. yeah i liked this one.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I like what you said just fine... :hug:
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frazzled-mage Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2009
but sometimes i know on my work i want someone to see what is going on with it and give me the insight to make it better. All i have this time for you is ....uh, cool.
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 6, 2009   Writer
dreams were cheap
when we were young

we could crumple them up
like miswritten love notes
and throw them out
to start again


:clap:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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:iconpseudometry:
pseudometry Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2009   Writer
I love the sentiment of this. It's too true, and it applies I think to the metaphorical aging of a relationship as well as an individual's biological lifespan. A bittersweet reminder of how little we value the good things we have when we have them. Great piece.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Jamie. I love it when you see all the meaning. :hug:

I haven't seen you much lately. How are you?
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2009   Writer
You're very welcome.

I'm good. Work is keeping me busy, which is unfortunate, but also fortunate given the recession and all that.
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2009
oooo love the imagery of reality's heavy boot!
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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EatingMyOwnFears Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2009
:heart:
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WolfenFire Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009
Even if you think it's rough, it's very well written. ^-^ Nice work. :)
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
You know how sometimes it just won't come out the way you want it to? That's how it's been, so I really appreciate that. :hug:
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WolfenFire Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009
I see. Hope you get through the writing block soon. :hug:
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LarUbai Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
2 4 3 3 4 2
is there a pattern here?

you've managed
once again
focusing
smooth water
amidst rapids
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
To be truthful, I tried to force it into a 2 3 2 3 pattern and finally just gave up, so if it has a pattern, it's accidental. :)

Thanks very much. That's a lovely compliment. :hug:
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LarUbai Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009
Ackshually ...
I see the content as completeness of thought.
Don't see how you could communicate greater sincerity with anything less.
When one's heart speaks .. it can't be constrained
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Malandante Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful piece :heart:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Alli. :)
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JiggyGoodin Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
It is amazing how often and easily the young trade their dreams in. Good thing age and wisdom teach tenacity and patience. Keep on keepin' on.:optimism:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed. Of course, youth has a whole different set of troubles, so I guess I should be satisfied. :)
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Tuishimi Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
Wow. Very nice. And very ... true.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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it's still really good, keep it up, i like your poems :)
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. :hug:
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
This is wonderful. You've expressed the feeling so well! I've been struggling with my dreams (and lack of fulfillment of them) recently and this poem voices that exactly.

Insouciance is a great word. I love that you used it here.

I especially like both your 2nd and 3rd stanzas. The only change I thought of was maybe switching your 3rd stanza around a bit. Instead of saying "new ones plucked lazily" maybe "Lazily plucking new ones" so that the thought continues from your 2nd stanza into the 3rd without breaking.

It's a lovely poem Cindy :aww:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Julie. There are just some days...I tire of the struggle, you know? But we have to soldier on and keep looking for them, right? :hug:

I love that word, too. It's not one I find to fit very often. :)

I really like your suggestion. I think you're right that it works better that way. I've changed it. See what you think and thanks again. :hug:
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009
Yes - that's exactly how I feel. Tired of trying, but we do have to keep dreaming and trying - otherwise there's no point to it.

I like it with the change, and you're welcome! :hug:
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kakanina Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
wow, This is brilliant, I love it.
Most certainly not "rough" by any definition of mine anyhow. Nice work ^^
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. :hug:
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kakanina Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009
no problem ^^
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
Cindy there is one thing about you that ought to be false, and that's your modesty.

This is a lovely meditation, presenting a particular point of view that is a particular moment for you, a stage of inner dialogue that you have been generous enough to share with your readers.

In that act of sharing, you have given your poem the lie?
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, Alec. You always say just the right thing. This one was like pulling teeth for me. I knew what I wanted to say, but I couldn't seem to arrange the words to say it. I finally just quit to go to work; I suppose that's why it felt rough and unfinished to me. Thank you again. :hug:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
:hug:

(I'll have final news about how when and where regarding my Missouri trip by the end of this week.)
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I'll look forward to hearing about that. :hug:
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TheAfterWhys Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
rough? well, beautifully so then. ^^
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :hug:
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TheAfterWhys Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
you're very welcome
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frazzled-mage Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
wow seems you and i have both been looking at dreams and hopes that are long in the tooth.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds like. It sucks sometimes. Maybe we should try to find some new ones. :hug:
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praytell Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
:hug: if you are writing, it cant be all bad . . . :hug:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Christopher. I'm tired of this wallowing around. I'm gonna write, even if it's no good. :hug:
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praytell Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
and who said it was no good? :hug:
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jsting Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
:clap:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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XxLonesomeDovexX Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
I rly like it :heart:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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Wolfgirl-Lover Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
the mood feels sad really
almost like this is what you've felt like before once and its coming out in these words
(just my opinion but i've felt that way before)
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. I know exactly how you feel. :hug:
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Wolfgirl-Lover Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009
you're welcome i loved it=)
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