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the world conspires
against me

a garroting cord
an unyielding doorknob

a scratched throat
a bruised hip

small pains I’ll forget
by tomorrow

but today
in this silent house

they act as keys
unlocking the wellspring

of feeling  
I cannot contain

a choking lament
that dissolves

the world
into weeping
C.
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Nefex Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
I've been home alone a lot lately, so this is very easy to relate with
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the-mighty-pillow Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
oh this is so beautiful :heart:

the ending is amazing and the images are great :)
i love this poem
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Malandante Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful.
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2009
i love the last 2 verses. you used words so beautifully although the poem seems dark

:heart:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
This is a lot further into the dark than your protagonist usually gets.

The combination of the stark imagery of self destruction with the rather flat language increasesits potency.

I think thepeom wouldn't be i,proved by substituting taps or floodgates for keys. Therer is an incongruity brtween the notions of lock and key and the watery images that follow, but it's not beyond the orry range of dreams, Symbols can often make their point by conflicflincting?
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009   Writer
a choking lament
that dissolves

the world
into weeping


:clap:
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009
You've been following me around again Cindy. God yes - I know this feeling.

Very well written and expressed. :hug:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It was just one of those days, ya know? Today's been better though. :hug:
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009
Do I ever! :huggle:
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