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Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


I’ve learned to
protect myself
from everyone
but you.

They throw words
like whetted knives,

guilt like balanced
circus axes,

tears like drops
of acid.

From these, I’ve
learned to retreat
behind walls of stone; eyes
as cold as glacial ice
hide the bleeding.

Yet from you, I find
no escape, your silence
a weapon I cannot
deflect.

No matter how deeply
I burrow into myself,
your muteness follows me,
wraps around me
like a shroud

until I find myself
without defense,
naked and helpless
before lips long
dead of words.
©2009 *Blueskye27
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!praytell Mar 19, 2009, 8:14:43 PM
well . . you no me: i aint a tinkerer. if i post it, i will prolly only fix the spelling or syllable count (if it matters). in other words: its lovely like it is, but thats just me:hug:
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~Anubis187 Mar 19, 2009, 8:15:48 PM
The structure is really interesting. I like it. Keep up the good work.

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~thepoetvampire Mar 19, 2009, 8:15:58 PM
No matter how deeply
I burrow into myself,
your muteness follows me,
wraps around me
like a shroud

i love that stanza especially. beautiful work; i have missed reading your poetry.

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"lift up the receiver, i'll make you a believer."
- "personal jesus" by depeche mode
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*thaumadzo Mar 19, 2009, 8:16:47 PM
I like this Cindy, it speaks to me.

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"Seeing" the unusual...EVERY DAY
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*TyC113 Mar 19, 2009, 8:29:48 PM
I like this. Very beautiful.

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~Masa-chan Mar 19, 2009, 8:39:18 PM
You posted this with pinpoint precision on timing, as far as my little world is concerned.

I wept.

Thank you for another beautiful piece. :heart:

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Cuckuhim 'o 'ab him.
Wepeghim 'o 'abai him.
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~Pokey-the-Great Mar 19, 2009, 9:38:47 PM
Lovely and sad :heart:

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~ihatenature Mar 19, 2009, 11:33:00 PM
I love this. It pretty much explains how I feel completely.

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- "This is the way the world ends
Not with a bang but a whimper." - TS Eliot
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=AlecBell Mar 19, 2009, 11:45:09 PM
This is a very enigmatic "you".

But the speaker is another enigma. The poem works, I think, because the reader can experience the knots these two characters have managed to tie themselves into?

Possibly the speaker is addressing a figure from the past. That would account for the inside/ outside contrast the speaker stresses.

On the level of what Chris called tinkering, I wonder if "But"(line 16) might be "Yet."?

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*Blueskye27 Mar 20, 2009, 3:53:47 AM
Thanks, Alec. I changed the "yet," and I do like that better. Are you that's all? This is one of those that seemed so much more powerful in my mind, but it won't go down on paper like I envision it. I was trying to show silence as an almost physical thing that follows one everywhere. I don't think I quite made it. Thanks for the insight. :hug:
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