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I smooth a wrinkle
out of my skirt and
remember a time you
pressed knots out of
my back.

But that was long ago
when my skin
ran moist with love
and your hands gleamed
wet with me.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2008
Hello Cindy

This poem is a perfect vignette. The second stanza expresses just the right degree of laconic regret. :hug:

Further enlargement belongs in the reader's mind.

There is another possibility that you might consider (for another occasion perhaps), and that is writing with the pronoun "she". This transposition could lead you to an alternative way of understanding this fleeting material?
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Alec. I'm glad you like it. I rather like it this way myself. :hug:

I'm not so good with that third person; I need to work on it. :heart:
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1001G Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
:icongrin--plz:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
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1001G Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
hello cindy, spend all your money?
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Sure did. It was fun, too! :w00t:

My sister's shopping is completely done! :clap:
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1001G Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
and its not even thanksgiving....fantastic
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Of course, now I have to wrap them all...
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1001G Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2008
:rofl: im sure she would love to help you.......
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Actually, no... :rofl:
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