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I lie among cool sheets
in a dim afternoon
listening to rain
fall, the sounds
it makes tapping
at the windows,
dripping from
the eaves,

and I remember
another afternoon
when you lay here
with me in the
quiet of evening
and whispered
promises in
my hair as
day slid into
night –

promises,
though unkept,
still beautiful in
the making.
I love rain...
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:iconadmantina:
Admantina Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
I just pictured this in my mind, and it was beautiful.

:heart:

I haven't read any of your writing for so long, I'd almost forgotten how wonderful it is.
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:iconwhoapony:
whoapony Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009
A steady, peaceful rain is so good for thinking and remembering...
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TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I do too. Especially when I fall asleep listening to it.

Lovely job.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009
"though unkept,
still beautiful
in the making"

Sweet and wry.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Alec. :hug:
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:iconspectrumchaser:
Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
How sweet and wistful this is.

I like listening to the rain too. It does make for lots of memories and musings.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Something about rain makes me want to write...or cry. :aww:
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:iconspectrumchaser:
Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
I can totally relate!
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:iconcolonelfitz:
ColonelFitz Featured By Owner May 29, 2009
Those last lines were wonderful. :heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :hug:
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:iconb1gfan:
b1gfan Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Student Writer
Ahhh promises, and the pain of that elusive unkept dream....:( each made both better and worse by the rain :D
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, indeed. Rain is funny that way, isn't it? It can be so comforting at times and so dreary at others.
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:iconwolfenfire:
WolfenFire Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
Very beautiful. :) Another nice poem. :heart:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Lindsey. :hug:

How are you?
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:iconwolfenfire:
WolfenFire Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
:hug: I'm happy. It's my birthday today. ^^
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Really? Happy, happy birthday! Yay! :cake::party:
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:iconwolfenfire:
WolfenFire Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
Hehe, thank you. :)
My friend wished me a happy birthday nearly 20 times today. =P
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:iconscarlettletters:
Scarlettletters Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Professional Writer
Full of lovely sounds and images...
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Brendan. :hug:
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:icondiamondgirlfl:
DiamondGirlFL Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
I love this. So soft and sweet.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Nina. :hug:
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:iconstaatsf:
staatsf Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
very sad sweet
staats
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Staats. :hug:
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:icondarqueness:
Darqueness Featured By Owner May 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful imagery!
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Crys. :hug:
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:iconwhateverjulie:
whateverjulie Featured By Owner May 26, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
wow short but very sweet! :aww:
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconyouinventedme:
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner May 26, 2009   Writer
that last stanza is a doozy
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Shane. :hug:
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:iconprettycrazy:
PrettyCrazy Featured By Owner May 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I love your poetry.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, An. I'm so glad you do. :aww:
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TheMockingBird Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
"still beautiful in the making" wonderful line and wonderful poem as well. ^_^
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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:iconthemockingbird:
TheMockingBird Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2009
:blush: No problem, well deserved.
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:iconchantelephone:
chantelephone Featured By Owner May 25, 2009   Photographer
beautiful :heart:
i love the rain too.. so glad it's winter atm.
has such a calming effect.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:

Where are you that it's winter? The summer is just beginning here.
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:iconchantelephone:
chantelephone Featured By Owner May 27, 2009   Photographer
in australia (:
well. not really winter.
autumn.. but it's nearly winter
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, I see. Autumn's my favorite time of year. I hope yours is lovely. :hug:
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Nymphe-AR Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
Love the rain :)
Beautiful, indeed.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconnymphe-ar:
Nymphe-AR Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
:)
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:iconottersandsky:
ottersandsky Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
Me too. I love the atmosphere created in the first stanza.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Katie. :hug:
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:iconottersandsky:
ottersandsky Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
My pleasure.
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Osiristhrasher06 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
just the fact that you say "in a dim afternoon" instead of "on a dim afternoon" makes a huge difference and gives this a completely different feeling. it's very subtle, but i think it's important.

i love this.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It's interesting that you should notice that; I actually went back and forth between "in" and "on" right there. Thanks for the close reading and the kind words. :hug:
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:iconosiristhrasher06:
Osiristhrasher06 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
absolutely.
thank you for the intricate and beautiful writing. :)
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:iconbrandendboomschors:
BrandendBoomschors Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful poem.
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:iconblueskye27:
Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconartfly101:
artfly101 Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
I like the rain, and that was a beautiful poem:)
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