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I lie among cool sheets
in a dim afternoon
listening to rain
fall, the sounds
it makes tapping
at the windows,
dripping from
the eaves,

and I remember
another afternoon
when you lay here
with me in the
quiet of evening
and whispered
promises in
my hair as
day slid into
night –

promises,
though unkept,
still beautiful in
the making.
I love rain...
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Admantina Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2009
I just pictured this in my mind, and it was beautiful.

:heart:

I haven't read any of your writing for so long, I'd almost forgotten how wonderful it is.
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whoapony Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009
A steady, peaceful rain is so good for thinking and remembering...
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TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I do too. Especially when I fall asleep listening to it.

Lovely job.
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009
"though unkept,
still beautiful
in the making"

Sweet and wry.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, Alec. :hug:
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
How sweet and wistful this is.

I like listening to the rain too. It does make for lots of memories and musings.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Something about rain makes me want to write...or cry. :aww:
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Spectrumchaser Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2009
I can totally relate!
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ColonelFitz Featured By Owner May 29, 2009
Those last lines were wonderful. :heart:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :hug:
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