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Folding sheets for the king-sized
bed of which I’m the sole occupant
hardly seems worth the effort.
Downsizing would be more
sensible – the blankets and comforters
less bothersome to launder – more
room freed for bookshelves or
clean open spaces.

Yet I always choose to keep it,

hoping in the future
that I won't be here
alone.
Laundry day....

Cut much of the second stanza on Alec's advice. Thanks, Alec. :hug:
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jsting Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2008
"second occupant" seemed business like to me. and your other poems have this wonderful turn to the amorous and steamy.

i thought of guest or unexpected guest or amorous visitor and a few others that were too on the head... i don't know. but that's why you're the master poet and i'm not.

still, this poem is so sweetly hopeful. :clap:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I think you're right. I changed that last line. Tell me what you think. :hug:

And thanks for the help!
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jsting Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008
I started this long note of thoughts that ended up circling me around to my first reaction:

what a wonderfully bitter sweet ending.


bitter sweet.



:cry: :hug:
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:hug::hug::hug:
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jsting Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008
P.S. ??

hoping in the future
not to be here
alone

??
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jsting Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008
never mind. haha. (wish we could delete silly comments).
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Non-Numerus Featured By Owner May 8, 2008
So I missed the ending? Aww...
Anyways, larger bed = more space, and bigger comforter. Bigger comforter = wrap around you. Wrap around you = warm. Larger bed = warm. Transitive property of equality.
I like the poem.
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 8, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Transitive property of equality...that's rather nice. Thanks. :aww:
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner May 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I love having big beds to myself. I'm such a bed-hog! Plus it gives more room for tossing and turning when under stress... and not falling off. :)
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Blueskye27 Featured By Owner May 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, falling off is bad...
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